Nice. The last line is perfect. I haven’t seen this style of haiku before with the rhyming scheme. It’s pretty cool and gives more of a flow – maybe that’s why you called it strumming.
Stop reading my mind! 🙂 This is the one I’ve been grappling with for a few weeks. It began as a half written old poem of mine, but it was tethered to the past in an unsatisfactory way, representing feelings I no longer feel. So, after I got past the notion of trying to resurrect those emotions for the sake of this piece, I decided to make it a different type of labor… an ongoing haiku… that strummed together the breadcrumbs which led to said enlightenment. Anyway, thanks… and I really don’t mind you reading my mind.
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Nice. The last line is perfect. I haven’t seen this style of haiku before with the rhyming scheme. It’s pretty cool and gives more of a flow – maybe that’s why you called it strumming.
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Stop reading my mind! 🙂 This is the one I’ve been grappling with for a few weeks. It began as a half written old poem of mine, but it was tethered to the past in an unsatisfactory way, representing feelings I no longer feel. So, after I got past the notion of trying to resurrect those emotions for the sake of this piece, I decided to make it a different type of labor… an ongoing haiku… that strummed together the breadcrumbs which led to said enlightenment. Anyway, thanks… and I really don’t mind you reading my mind.
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